From 6e9829a8849a4a0ab42044d7da42fd6bd29ed73e Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Julian Blake Kongslie Date: Wed, 20 Feb 2013 23:57:14 -0800 Subject: More outline work for Try Again. --- outlines/try-again.mdwn | 163 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++---- 1 file changed, 150 insertions(+), 13 deletions(-) diff --git a/outlines/try-again.mdwn b/outlines/try-again.mdwn index 284ff64..adb2ef3 100644 --- a/outlines/try-again.mdwn +++ b/outlines/try-again.mdwn @@ -15,7 +15,7 @@ This is my take on the reptilia28's "Don't fear the reaper" challenge: > > * When Harry asks what was supposed to have happened, Death goes off on a rant > saying how he was supposed to have killed Voldemort, found his soulmate -> ("Some Granger girl...") and lived to be a centennial age. But since Harry +> ("Some Granger girl..".) and lived to be a centennial age. But since Harry > keeps getting into life-threatening situations for one reason or another, he > keeps dying before that happens. Harry is surprised about the soulmate part. > @@ -54,8 +54,8 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Because he's not alive, Voldemort can be permanently destroyed by a simple exorcism. On any fragment of himself. - * The prophecy applies to some dark lord in Canada. He was vanquished, as per - prophecy, in 1984 by someone else. + * The prophecy applies to some dark lord in South Africa. He was vanquished, + as per prophecy, in 1984 by someone else. * The dark lord Tom Jerry Aspheart. @@ -63,6 +63,16 @@ Here's my outline so far: * By poisoning him with Aconite. + * Why is Harry getting a special chance to keep his memories this time? + He's reached the limit for mortal reincarnations. This time he has to go + back as an official "employee" of fate, obligated to keep his memory, have a + healthy long-term relationship with Hermione including children, and survive + to at least age 134. + + * It's his last chance; if he fails, they'll just rewind time to before the + first blood purity war and use someone else; Harry and friends will never + have existed. + * Because I need a villain, this is going to be a manipulative Dumbledore story, will all the clichés that entails. @@ -98,7 +108,7 @@ Here's my outline so far: them to be a loving family for him. * Dumbledore left charms to keep them mad, but they are overpowered by Harry's - compultions. + compulsions. * Dumbledore never notices, as he never checked up on Harry anyway. @@ -109,6 +119,33 @@ Here's my outline so far: ("for an adventure, like camping!") as part of the scam to keep Dumbledore in the dark. +* Some early interactions with Hermione? + + * Harry wants a childhood, and with the Dursleys under compulsions and + cooperative, he's damn well going to get one. + + * Harry excels at his studies instead of being held back to Dudley's level, + and is transferred to an accelerated program, where he meets Hermione. + + * Harry practices Occlumancy as "meditation" because it helps him "keep his + thoughts organized". Hermione might as well get interested in this, too. + + * Harry fakes some accidental magic around Hermione, mostly to make her not + feel like a freak. + + * Harry is present when Hermione gets her letter, but is not recognized by + McGonagall because he has already permanently altered his appearance. + + * McGonagall does not approve of telling someone not in the family, so Harry + is sent home. + + * Hermione of course immediately tells Harry everything, as she recognizes + that he has also performed "accidental" magic. + + * They go to Diagon Alley together and find the books about him. They all talk + to the Goblins together. These meetings go a long way towards preventing + Hermione from viewing adults in the magical world as trustworthy. + * Harry shows up to Hogwarts after some sort of permanent appearance alteration. * Metamorphagus? I'd rather not, to be honest. Permanent transfiguration @@ -343,7 +380,7 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Harry and Hermione get this whole lecture from the Goblins about how "some races need someone to rule them, or they devolve into chaos and - violence." + violence". * Dobby goes to work for the Goblins. @@ -382,7 +419,7 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Harry eventually just settles on the plan "I'll show up for Arithmancy, and I'll do the work for Arithmancy, and I won't show up or do the homework for Divination, and I'd like to see them punish me for attending - class." + class". * After a few faceoffs, Dumbledore eventually has to cave in the face of objections from over half his staff. @@ -474,7 +511,7 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Fourth year: Dumbledore has organized the Triwizard Tournament, primarily as a mechanism to restore some of Britain's fading glory. - * The defense teacher actually is Moody this time. He's too paranoid to do a + * The Defense teacher actually is Moody this time. He's too paranoid to do a particularly good job, but he's better than Lockhart. * Crouch Jr. escaped, but didn't go after Moody. We hear about the murder of @@ -527,6 +564,17 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Fifth year, Fudge is now convinced that last year was a setup by Dumbledore to humiliate him and drive him out of office. + * Hermione is a prefect, but Dumbledore has prevented Flitwick from naming + Harry as a prefect. + + * Hermione objects strongly, especially when she discovers that Ron and + Draco are also prefects. + + * Flitwick makes it very clear to everyone that even though Harry does not + have a badge, Flitwick himself will issue any point deductions or + detentions that Harry asks him to, sight unseen. Harry is thus an + "unofficial" prefect. + * He sends Umbridge in to keep an eye on Dumbledore. * This time there's no particular animosity between Umbridge and Harry. @@ -539,18 +587,28 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Umbridge foolishly targets Susan Bones with the blood quill this time. Amelia Bones finds out, and things do not end well for Umbridge. - * Now halfway through the year and without a defense teacher, Harry decides to - try more Goblin integration and gets them to send a defense teacher. + * Now halfway through the year and without a Defense teacher, Harry decides to + try more Goblin integration and gets them to send a Defense teacher. * Dumbledore is disgraced and desperate at this point, so he latches on to the idea. - * What follows is one of the bloodiest and most effective defense classes + * What follows is one of the bloodiest and most effective Defense classes Hogwarts has ever had. + * Students showing up to their next class missing a limb becomes a regular + thing. + + * Fortunately, it's all healed relatively easily. + * At the end of the year, parents and the board absolutely *demand* that Dumbledore find someone else. + * Goblins tell Harry and Hermione "should you ever wish to continue your + education with us, the Goblin nation will be happy to accept you". They + thank them politely, and tell them they will consider that after + Hogwarts. + * Harry and friends do well on their O.W.L.s. * Sixth year: without the Dementors policing Azkaban, several prisoners escape @@ -558,9 +616,22 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Lestranges, Carrows, possibly one or two others? - * Snape teaches defense, and is predictably shitty. + * Harry is officially granted the prefect position this year. + + * The previous male Ravenclaw prefect for his year has nothing but respect + for Harry; there is no animosity and indeed the "unofficial prefect" + stance of the previous year was in part his idea. + + * Snape teaches Defense, and is predictably shitty. + + * After both the Christmas and Easter breaks, we hear about some students + not returning to Hogwarts because the Goblins offered to tutor them + instead. + + * Harry and Hermione got this offer at the end of last year, but didn't + recognize it for what it was and stayed at Hogwarts. - * Slughorn is teaching potions; without the looming threat of Voldemort, Harry + * Slughorn is teaching Potions; without the looming threat of Voldemort, Harry was not required to convince him to return. * The escaped prisoners have Dumbledore keeping Harry confined to the castle, @@ -595,6 +666,21 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Some interaction with the younger Weasleys? Love potions, perhaps. + * Ginny dosing them gives us one more way to show Hermione that magical + society is disgusting. + + * Of course, Dumbledore covers up what's going on. + + * Harry manages to get the situation public enough to really embarrass + Dumbledore. + + * At Slughorn's party, Harry and Hermione switch the love potion dosages + so Ron is attracted to Ginny and Draco is attracted to Ron. + + * The resulting extremely public fight results in both Ron and Draco + losing their prefect badges, and the disgrace of Ron and Ginny for + participating in a love potion campaign. + * Over the year and the following summer, there are attacks by the escapees. * The international community takes notice and officially quarantines Britain @@ -604,7 +690,23 @@ Here's my outline so far: his actions so far, and it comes together too quickly for him to realize what's happening. - * Immediately after the sorting feast, Draco activates the vanishing cabinet + * Snape still teaching Defense. + + * A record low N.E.W.T.s in Defense were earned last year. Not counting + students who were in S.M.U.T., it was in fact *zero*. + + * Harry continues to run S.M.U.T., and recruits enough help to offer it for + all year groups. + + * Students take to referring to Harry and Hermione as Professor. + + * Hermione is named head girl, but Neville is named head boy. Most of the + school, including Neville, think this is a joke. + + * Everyone knows that Harry is sleeping in the other half of the Ravenclaw + head suite with Hermione. + + * Immediately after the Easter holiday, Draco activates the vanishing cabinet and signals to the escapees. * The Goblins have been prepared for this, and have a way to intercept the @@ -612,12 +714,30 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Purebloods meet basilisk. Basilisk wins. + * Harry takes advantage of the confusion to stun Dumbledore in the back. + + * Having access to the cloak and ring already, Harry is now once again + the Master of Death. He's expecting to be a part of the fight against the + blood purists; as he doesn't yet realize how prepared he's left the + Goblins for this fight. + + * The Goblins cart Dumbledore away to answer for his part in the bigotry + against nonhumans. + * A great many Wizengamot representatives were part of the planned attack. There is a huge power vacuum, paralyzing government. * The Goblins immediately place armed guards throughout Wizarding society, taking the place of the (confused, panicing) aurors. + * Here we see Goblin-run werewolf armies subduing the British wizards, Veela + using auras to dominate the populace and establish order, house elves + rebelling against their masters and going to work for the Goblins en masse, + etc. + + * Without Dumbledore, the Order is flailing about and unable to respond in any + adequate manner. They are quickly defeated. + * Goblins apply for recognition with the ICW as an interim British government. * As soon as the ICW approves, the Goblins start interrogating *everybody*, @@ -631,11 +751,28 @@ Here's my outline so far: Wizards in the worst possible light and arranging for assistance in the reeducation and integration of the Wizards. + * Sirius, as it happens, has been conspiring with the Goblins for some time + now; he's really mad at pureblood society for denying him a childhood, + murdering his friends, and preventing his own justice for so long. + + * Sirius never told Harry because he has seen Harry as a child, not a + co-conspirator. + + * He just wants Harry to grow up in a Britain where there can be no more + Voldemorts. + * Hogwarts is shut down as "a hotbed of bigotry and intolerance". * Harry and close friends are vetted and named the first Human citizens of the "Reformed British Magical Empire". + * Goblins ask Hermione if she wants to help setup educational standards for + their reeducation camps to turn the pureblood wizards into respectable + people. + + * "Politeness and Open-mindedness Reeducation Network". Turns out that the + Goblins can't name anything, either. + * We end the story with Harry, horrified at what he's done, making motions towards fleeing to Australia with Hermione and a few others. -- cgit v1.2.3