From 79c24df9f2771b3c59f01eb19607e3918b11b70e Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Julian Blake Kongslie Date: Wed, 20 Feb 2013 22:27:24 -0800 Subject: More work on the Try Again outline. --- outlines/try-again.mdwn | 213 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++---- 1 file changed, 196 insertions(+), 17 deletions(-) diff --git a/outlines/try-again.mdwn b/outlines/try-again.mdwn index 5cfd1a7..284ff64 100644 --- a/outlines/try-again.mdwn +++ b/outlines/try-again.mdwn @@ -43,8 +43,6 @@ This is my take on the reptilia28's "Don't fear the reaper" challenge: > > * Dumbledore's manipulations can be a factor in Harry's premature demises. -
- Here's my outline so far: * Death has no idea who Voldemort or Tom Riddle are. They just aren't important. @@ -59,6 +57,12 @@ Here's my outline so far: * The prophecy applies to some dark lord in Canada. He was vanquished, as per prophecy, in 1984 by someone else. + * The dark lord Tom Jerry Aspheart. + + * Defeated by some kid named Avernus Seeps. + + * By poisoning him with Aconite. + * Because I need a villain, this is going to be a manipulative Dumbledore story, will all the clichés that entails. @@ -150,19 +154,51 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Harry sorts into Ravenclaw along with Hermione. -* Quirrel isn't possessed, but still tries to steal the stone. Let's face it, he - was evil to begin with, or else Voldemort wouldn't have been able to talk him - into the possession scheme. + * On the train, Harry convinces Hermione that Gryffindor is the "bully house" + because he doesn't want her to get trolled again. + +* Harry does everything he can to avoid animosity with Draco, but it doesn't + work. + + * They meet in Diagon Alley, and Harry tries to ask about why blood would be + more important than magic, but Draco immediately writes him off as an uppity + mudblood and leaves. + + * They meet on the train and Draco insults Hermione. Harry asks him politely + to not insult his friend, and offers his hand. Draco refuses it. + + * Draco is essentially jealous of Boy-Who-Lived political capital, especially + because this Harry is going out of his way to make friends other than Ron, + and takes it as an insult that Harry associates with nonpurebloods and is + rejecting his place in society as the hero. + +* Quirrell isn't possessed, but still tries to steal the stone. Let's face it, + he was evil to begin with, or else Voldemort wouldn't have been able to talk + him into the possession scheme. * Turns out being possessed by an insane and technically dead spirit isn't - really all that good for you. Unpossessed Quirrel is competent. + really all that good for you. Unpossessed Quirrell is competent. + + * Halloween still has a troll. + + * Hermione was insulted by Ron in charms class, and ran off crying. Harry + immediately rushed after her. + + * Harry is able to convince her to leave the bathroom before the feast + begins. + + * They bump into Snape in the hallways on their way from the bathroom, and + both get detention removing broken bristles from brooms. + + * Troll interrupts detention. Harry rescues Hermione by flying them out the + window on a broom. * Harry has to intervene. - * Steals the stone himself very early on, but Quirrel and Dumbledore don't + * Steals the stone himself very early on, but Quirrell and Dumbledore don't know this. - * Quirrel eventually takes some students hostage as part of his bid for the + * Quirrell eventually takes some students hostage as part of his bid for the stone, including Harry. * Harry defeats him, while trying very hard to not make himself look @@ -170,6 +206,23 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Harry does not get on the Quidditch team his first year. + * The flying class incident happens, but Harry is in the other class because + he's a Ravenclaw, so he isn't present. We only hear about it happening + off-camera; Ron and Draco both got detention and banned from further flying + lessons. + + * Hermione does not like flying at all, and basically refuses to leave the + ground during the lessons. + + * In the troll incident above, Harry rescues Hermione by flying a broom. He is + seen by teachers. + + * Hermione gains a new appreciation for flying, and agrees to let Harry take + her flying again sometime. + + * Flitwick and Hooch recommend that Harry try our for Quidditch in 3rd year, + when some spots will open up. + * Harry gets the cloak first year, but realizes it has tracking charms and such on it courtesy of Dumbledore. @@ -200,19 +253,25 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Many purebloods, notably Malfoy, lose quite a lot of money and power. + * It comes out that Harry is Sirius' heir, and so Draco hates Harry even + more now. + * Second year we still get basilisk attacks. * The diary is already dead, but Lucius had communicated with it beforehand. * Draco is instructed to release the basilisk. - * It doesn't help that he isn't a parselmouth and has no real control over it. + * It doesn't help that he isn't a parceltongue and has no real control over + it. * Students die. So does Lockhart. * Hagrid still arrested without due process. - * Harry, being a parseltongue, manages to assume control of the basilisk and + * Dumbledore essentially refuses to do anything, as per original timeline. + + * Harry, being a parceltongue, manages to assume control of the basilisk and divert it from its rampage. * He doesn't want to kill it, but it can't stay in the school. @@ -221,7 +280,7 @@ Here's my outline so far: to sleep. * Harry gives it to the Goblins, who assure him that they have access to - parseltongue Goblins and will use it for bank security. + parceltongue Goblins and will use it for bank security. * The Goblins issue a statement (at Harry's request) saying they were paid to defeat the basilisk and have done so. @@ -234,13 +293,75 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Dobby, basically the same as canon. + * Over the summer, Dobby has been stealing mail. + + * Hermione and Harry were communicating using the phone, and in person. + Hermione had not realized there was a problem. + + * Harry had noticed the missing mail, because he was expecting statements + from the Goblins and remembered the past timeline. + + * So he contacted the Goblins and arranged for Dobby's magical signature + to be registered as a criminal elf with them. + + * Harry and Hermione arrive at the train station, and are delayed by Dobby + blocking the portal to the platform. + + * The Weasleys arrive at about the same time. Ron is blocked with them. + + * Because Dumbledore is still hoping to setup Harry with his pet light + side family. + + * Ron immediately overreacts and steals his family's car to fly to + Hogwarts. + + * Harry and Hermione call the aurors. They are apparated onto the platform + by one. + + * The aurors also record Dobby's magical signature and register it as a + likely criminal. + + * Ron arrives at Hogwarts in exactly the same way as canon. + + * Harry is studying in the library with Hermione during the Quidditch match. + Dobby still attacks him with a bludger. + + * Turns out that Irma Pince is a hell of a lot better at healing charms + than Lockhart is. Also, she's **really** mad about a bludger somehow + making its way into the library. + + * So she gets Quidditch cancelled until the problem can be identified. + + * Of course, Draco had bought his way on to the team this year. So now + Draco hates Harry even more. + + * When the Goblins capture the Basilisk, they identify Dobby by magical + signature. + + * Dobby is repossessed and forcibly freed, as supported by law regarding + elves used in criminal acts. + + * Harry and Hermione get this whole lecture from the Goblins about how + "some races need someone to rule them, or they devolve into chaos and + violence." + + * Dobby goes to work for the Goblins. + + * Hermione does not start S.P.E.W., but instead asks if there's any way + to help the Goblins with their situation. + + * This whole thing forshadows the Goblins taking over Britain, but of + course Harry can't see it coming. + + * And, of course, Draco just lost his elf and blames Harry. + * Also second year, we need some political movements in the background. * Sirius has taken his seat on the Wizengamot, and is doing his best to get revenge on those who wronged him. - * Goblin rights are supported because hey, they helped him get revenge, and - it's something that would've pissed off his parents. + * Goblin rights are supported by Sirius because hey, they helped him get + revenge, and it's something that would've pissed off his parents. * Along with international pressure from the ICW, he successfully campaigns to have Dementors removed from Azkaban. @@ -253,9 +374,19 @@ Here's my outline so far: * No Dementors near Hogwarts to begin with, but there is talk about them in the background. - * Harry signs up for runes and arithmancy and care. Flitwick does not allow + * Harry signs up for runes, arithmancy, and care. Flitwick does not allow Hermione to sign up for everything, so she takes the same as Harry. + * Dumbledore tries to force Harry to sign up for Divination. + + * Harry eventually just settles on the plan "I'll show up for Arithmancy, + and I'll do the work for Arithmancy, and I won't show up or do the + homework for Divination, and I'd like to see them punish me for attending + class." + + * After a few faceoffs, Dumbledore eventually has to cave in the face of + objections from over half his staff. + * Harry, feeling like this is going to finally be a calm year, decides to sign up for Quidditch. @@ -263,6 +394,9 @@ Here's my outline so far: * He's OK, but not spectacular. + * Hermione decides to try out as well, having enjoyed flying with Harry. + Turns out that she's rubbish. + * Dementor attacks! * Hogsmeade weekend, resulting in evacuation interrupting Harry's first @@ -270,6 +404,14 @@ Here's my outline so far: * Quidditch match, resulting in serious injury to some players. + * Harry isn't involved (it's not a Ravenclaw game). + + * Harry, fearing for student safety, petitions the school and gets + Quidditch cancelled until the Dementors can be removed. + + * Draco, of course, is angered by this because he's now unable to play + Quidditch *again*, and it's once more Harry's fault. + * Harry isn't the one to solve the problem this time; ICW authorities step in and contain the Dementors. @@ -282,16 +424,53 @@ Here's my outline so far: * A faction blaming the foreigners for creating the problem to begin with. + * Lupin, as per original timeline, does not introduce himself to Harry as a + friend of the family. + + * Harry knows that Lupin is in Dumbledore's pocket, and had already soured + Sirius to him on the grounds that "he should have looked into your + situation" and "why did he never try to find me as a child" and such. + + * Hermione decides to ask Lupin for Patronus training. He agrees, in the + face of the Dementor attack at the Quidditch match. + + * Hermione "trains" Harry to cast the Patronus. + * Snape outs Lupin at the end of the year. -* Over this summer, Harry attends the Quidditch World Cup with Sirius. + * Hermione, having liked Lupin, is incensed. + + * Harry agrees with Hermione that it's stupid that werewolves have no job + prospects, especially as in this timeline Lupin technically never did + anything wrong. - * Ireland is not playing. + * As a way to make Hermione happy, and keep Lupin from being a resource for + Dumbledore, Harry arranges for Lupin to get a job with the Goblins. + + * This leads the Goblins to eventually hiring essentially all of Britain's + werewolf population as guards and cursebreakers. + + * These werewolves eventually form a core of the army that the Goblins use + to invade. + +* Over the summer, Harry attends the Quidditch World Cup with Sirius. + + * Ireland is not playing. Harry recognizes this as just an example of how the + timelines are becoming more and more different. + + * Hermione is incensed that the Veela are being objectified. * Bulgaria wins this time. * No deatheater attack. + * So, as the post-game celebrations are not interrupted this time, Harry and + Hermione have time to track down the Veela and talk to them about how they + are also being treated as second-class citizens. + + * The Veela are put in contact with the Goblins, who at this point are + starting to organize quite a large collection of "undesirable" magicals. + * Fourth year: Dumbledore has organized the Triwizard Tournament, primarily as a mechanism to restore some of Britain's fading glory. @@ -458,7 +637,7 @@ Here's my outline so far: "Reformed British Magical Empire". * We end the story with Harry, horrified at what he's done, making motions - towards fleeing to Australia. + towards fleeing to Australia with Hermione and a few others. * He is discretely notified that the Goblins are fine with this, but don't really realize that he's fleeing. -- cgit v1.2.3