From 9b57fb69df572bdfc9b4820dd47605487dbc5a06 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Julian Blake Kongslie Date: Wed, 23 Nov 2011 19:29:57 -0800 Subject: Minor typographic corrections. --- oneshots/four-weeks.mdwn | 6 +++--- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) (limited to 'oneshots/four-weeks.mdwn') diff --git a/oneshots/four-weeks.mdwn b/oneshots/four-weeks.mdwn index 02afcf6..8895c61 100644 --- a/oneshots/four-weeks.mdwn +++ b/oneshots/four-weeks.mdwn @@ -91,7 +91,7 @@ Ron, now. Finally, they could sleep.
Four Gryffindor first-years walked down the stairs to the common room Saturday -morning. They had *slept in*, a concept so phenomenally amazing to them that +morning. They had *slept in,* a concept so phenomenally amazing to them that they could scarcely keep the grins off their faces. Upon entering the common room, they were greeted by a mob. @@ -152,7 +152,7 @@ good night's sleep. > I've never been particularly happy with this piece; I've erased it and started > over at least once. It's a simple idea, but the execution seems to be very > dialog-heavy, which is a challenge for me to write. I am especially unhappy -> with McGonagall's part towards the end; it feels like there should be *more*, +> with McGonagall's part towards the end; it feels like there should be *more,* > but I seem unable to flesh that out. At nearly 1,200 words it's an acceptable > length for a oneshot, but I know I achieved neither elegance nor depth in > storytelling. @@ -162,7 +162,7 @@ good night's sleep. > term is pushing it) but the students involved haven't learned *any* > interesting spells at that point. Silencing is fifth-year material, they can't > stun each other to sleep, they can't even levitate Ron out the window until -> Halloween, which is near the end of *week 9*. At least by week 4 Harry has his +> Halloween, which is near the end of *week 9.* At least by week 4 Harry has his > broom, and I can invoke Percy for a silencing charm. I think it might be > funnier in a later year when the dorm-mates can have a scene where they try > more and more outlandish magical solutions, but at the same time I like the -- cgit v1.2.3