From 6cabe5ad6559677ec7cc3f027a102e5ce2e04ac1 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Julian Blake Kongslie
Date: Tue, 12 Feb 2013 20:58:23 -0800
Subject: Minor editing and some addition to Punishment.
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@@ -2,11 +2,11 @@
Harry *knew* it had been a bad idea.
-Madam Hooch had *told* them that if anyone flew on their broom while she was
+Madam Hooch had told them that if anyone flew on their broom while she was
away they'd be expelled. But Draco had gone off with Neville's remembrall and,
like an idiot, Harry had chased after him.
-And of *course* he'd gotten caught. Now Professor McGonagall was dragging him
+And of course he'd gotten caught. Now Professor McGonagall was dragging him
off to who-knows-where and by this time tomorrow he'd be back at the Dursley's.
All of a sudden, the thought occurred to Harry: This isn't fair! He'd been
@@ -40,8 +40,8 @@ again for a moment, preferring to focus on his anger rather than hear the
Professor describe (he assumed mockingly) his first attempt at flying.
Again his thoughts were interrupted, this time by Wood. After a brief
-interrogation -- no, he *obviously* had never heard of Quiddich before -- and it
-appeared a decision was made. Harry was to be a Seeker for Wood on some sport
+interrogation -- no, he *obviously* had never heard of Quidditch before -- and
+it appeared a decision was made. Harry was to be a Seeker for Wood on some sport
team, and he was to train hard, or McGonagall would consider additional
punishment.
@@ -81,7 +81,7 @@ Muggles?"
"I'm not expelled, Malfoy. McGonagall is starting my punishment next week."
-"Ha! That'll teach you to go up against a Slytherin, Potter!"
+"Ha! That'll teach you to go up against your betters, Potter!"
Ron, his face red with anger, jumped up from his seat and yelled, "Well at least
Gryffindors aren't too cowardly to fight our own battles!"
@@ -155,6 +155,40 @@ Strangely, perhaps, he found himself enjoying it.
+Neville returned to the dorm just before lights-out, and Harry took the
+opportunity to greet him and return the remembrall. Neville was greatly thankful
+and apologetic when he heard about Harry's punishment, which Harry quickly
+brushed off, saying he didn't regret doing the right thing for a friend.
+
+Seeing Ron still boasting in the corner with Seamus, Harry invited Neville and
+Hermione to sit with him at breakfast the next morning. After some earnest
+smiles and nods of agreement, the three students each retreated to their
+respective beds for sleep.
+
+Of course, Ron and Seamus got caught out after curfew. Harry was rudely awakened
+sometime after midnight by the two boys being marched back into the dorm.
+Bleary-eyed and tired, he barely had time to recognize the two before Ron let
+into him, "This is all your fault! We lost 50 points each and got detention
+because you abandoned me! Some friend you are!"
+
+"Ron, I told you what would happen. It's not my fault you didn't listen."
+
+At this, Ron's face turned almost as red as his hair. Just as he looked like he
+was about to explode in anger, Neville interrupted the argument, "Ron, if you
+wake up the prefects, you'll just lose even more points."
+
+Ron spun about and exclaimed, "Nobody asked you, squib." With that, he stormed
+over to his bed, collapsed on it, and angrily threw the curtains shut. Seamus
+gave Harry and Neville a sad look before quietly saying, "I'm not mad at you.
+Sorry about Ron," and heading to his own bed.
+
+
+
+At breakfast, Ron was sitting as far away from Harry as possible, occasionally
+sending angry scowls down the table. Harry, Hermione, and Neville spent the meal
+talking and doing some last-minute review for potions class, blithely ignoring
+the angry redhead.
+
> There's this idea I have: Harry has no idea about anything in the Wizarding
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