Revising year 4 in Try Again outline.

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@@ -524,9 +524,9 @@ Here's my outline so far:
     * He is expecting them to enter themselves, which he thinks would be a
       laugh.
 
-    * They decide to enter his name, which they think would be a laugh...
+    * They decide to enter themselves, which they think would be a laugh...
 
-    * ...as well as the names of several dozen other students...
+    * ...and Harry...
 
     * ...and Snape...
 
@@ -534,32 +534,103 @@ Here's my outline so far:
 
     * Obviously, every one of these names comes out of the cup.
 
+    * Because the twins' names were on one slip of paper (and nobody can tell
+      them apart anyway) they are required to compete as a *single* competitor.
+
+  * Harry and the twins straight-up admit cheating the cup, although Harry
+    expresses loud displeasure at his name being entered. Harry agrees to aim
+    for low scores on purpose, and the twins are going for laughs; most of the
+    school decides not to hate them.
+
   * Harry takes the opportunity to "research", primarily to create an excuse for
     his superior spellcasting abilities.
 
-  * More events, in order to better differentiate between the contestants.
+  * The dragon event:
+
+    * Harry gets a different dragon; ideally, he goes first this time.
+
+    * Harry requests a zero score from the judges, announces that he is going to
+      try the only idea he has, and summons the egg. Of course, it works.
+
+    * Judges give him a zero, as requested, except for Bagman and Dumbledore.
+
+    * Harry sells his egg to the Goblins.
 
-  * Harry very carefully arranges to get through the first events unhurt and in
-    the bottom half of the contestants.
+    * Fleur, Cedric, and Krum are basically canon.
 
-  * Harry sells his egg to the Goblins.
+    * Twins throw gillyweed at the dragon. It eats it, then falls over choking
+      on air. Charlie, who has been told their strategy beforehand, manages to
+      get the dragon to the lake before it dies. Everyone admits it was by far
+      the most effective method used.
 
-  * Fudge does a terrible job, only marginally better than...
+    * Fudge does a miserable job, poorly casting a few charms and
+      transfigurations. He does not get the egg.
 
-  * Snape completely fails at every event, having literally every single
-    Hogwarts contestant independently sabotage him.
+    * Snape is sabotaged, independently, by all the Hogwarts student champions:
+
+      * Twins have replaced his hair grease with something very flammable.
+
+      * Cedric has been working with Hagrid, and acquires some dragon pheremones
+        which are then "accidentally spilled" on Snape's cloak.
+
+      * Harry figures he won't need any "silly wand-waving" and carefully
+        replaces his wand with a fake.
+
+    * The dragon goes into an insane rage, and Snape is brutally slashed and
+      burned within seconds of the task beginning. He is rescued, barely alive.
 
   * Harry takes Hermione to the ball, and they have a good time.
 
-  * Harry does not summon anything from outside the field until the last event.
+  * The lake event:
+
+    * Harry gets Hermione. Cedric gets Cho. Twins get Alicia/Angelina. Fleur
+      gets her sister. Krum gets his date. Fudge gets his wife. Snape gets
+      Draco.
+
+    * Harry uses gillyweed, as before. Gets to Hermione, rescues her, then uses
+      a bubblehead charm to wake her. They hang out underwater right next to the
+      platform until time is up, intentionally getting a low score.
+
+    * Cedric/Krum basically as before.
+
+    * Fudge casts bubblehead and immediately gets lost. He is rescued after an
+      hour from the wrong side of the lake.
+
+    * Fleur makes it to her hostage without problems, because
+
+      * Cedric has dosed Snape with grindylow bait, so they all chase after him
+        instead.
+
+      * Harry cast a whole bunch of sticking charms on Draco while he was down
+        there, preventing Snape from freeing him.
+
+      * And...
+
+    * The twins are riding the giant squid, which they have somehow managed to
+      bribe. They rescue their hostages within moments, and spend the rest of
+      the time harassing Snape.
+
+  * The maze event:
+
+    * The start order is Twins, Krum, Cedric, Fleur, Harry, Fudge, Snape.
+
+    * The twins summon brooms and fly to the trophy before Krum gets into the
+      maze.
+
+    * The trophy is just a portkey to the awards platform. Remember, no
+      Voldemort.
+
+    * As soon as they arrive at the awards platform, the hedges vanish in a
+      poorly-planned piece of magic designed to allow the audience to see how
+      close each of the competitors was to the finish.
 
-    * When he summons a paid-for Goblin bodyguard...
+    * All the monsters from the maze are now loose.
 
-    * Who proceeds to cut a bloody swath through the maze, allowing Harry to
-      easily win the tournament.
+      * And they charge Snape, who is covered in attraction charms courtesy of
+        Harry and Cedric.
 
-    * Harry uses this to further prop up the Goblins, by giving them the
-      publicity and the prize money.
+      * Harry has a paid-for Goblin bodyguard, who massacres the attacking
+        monsters.
 
 * Fifth year, Fudge is now convinced that last year was a setup by Dumbledore to
   humiliate him and drive him out of office.
@@ -731,7 +802,7 @@ Here's my outline so far:
     taking the place of the (confused, panicing) aurors.
 
   * Here we see Goblin-run werewolf armies subduing the British wizards, Veela
-    using auras to dominate the populace and establish order, house elves
+    using their allure to dominate the populace and establish order, house elves
     rebelling against their masters and going to work for the Goblins en masse,
     etc.