More work on the Try Again outline.

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@@ -43,8 +43,6 @@ This is my take on the reptilia28's "Don't fear the reaper" challenge:
 >
 > * Dumbledore's manipulations can be a factor in Harry's premature demises.
 
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-
 Here's my outline so far:
 
 * Death has no idea who Voldemort or Tom Riddle are. They just aren't important.
@@ -59,6 +57,12 @@ Here's my outline so far:
   * The prophecy applies to some dark lord in Canada. He was vanquished, as per
     prophecy, in 1984 by someone else.
 
+    * The dark lord Tom Jerry Aspheart.
+
+    * Defeated by some kid named Avernus Seeps.
+
+    * By poisoning him with Aconite.
+
 * Because I need a villain, this is going to be a manipulative Dumbledore story,
   will all the clichés that entails.
 
@@ -150,19 +154,51 @@ Here's my outline so far:
 
 * Harry sorts into Ravenclaw along with Hermione.
 
-* Quirrel isn't possessed, but still tries to steal the stone. Let's face it, he
-  was evil to begin with, or else Voldemort wouldn't have been able to talk him
-  into the possession scheme.
+  * On the train, Harry convinces Hermione that Gryffindor is the "bully house"
+    because he doesn't want her to get trolled again.
+
+* Harry does everything he can to avoid animosity with Draco, but it doesn't
+  work.
+
+  * They meet in Diagon Alley, and Harry tries to ask about why blood would be
+    more important than magic, but Draco immediately writes him off as an uppity
+    mudblood and leaves.
+
+  * They meet on the train and Draco insults Hermione. Harry asks him politely
+    to not insult his friend, and offers his hand. Draco refuses it.
+
+  * Draco is essentially jealous of Boy-Who-Lived political capital, especially
+    because this Harry is going out of his way to make friends other than Ron,
+    and takes it as an insult that Harry associates with nonpurebloods and is
+    rejecting his place in society as the hero.
+
+* Quirrell isn't possessed, but still tries to steal the stone. Let's face it,
+  he was evil to begin with, or else Voldemort wouldn't have been able to talk
+  him into the possession scheme.
 
   * Turns out being possessed by an insane and technically dead spirit isn't
-    really all that good for you. Unpossessed Quirrel is competent.
+    really all that good for you. Unpossessed Quirrell is competent.
+
+  * Halloween still has a troll.
+
+    * Hermione was insulted by Ron in charms class, and ran off crying. Harry
+      immediately rushed after her.
+
+    * Harry is able to convince her to leave the bathroom before the feast
+      begins.
+
+    * They bump into Snape in the hallways on their way from the bathroom, and
+      both get detention removing broken bristles from brooms.
+
+    * Troll interrupts detention. Harry rescues Hermione by flying them out the
+      window on a broom.
 
   * Harry has to intervene.
 
-    * Steals the stone himself very early on, but Quirrel and Dumbledore don't
+    * Steals the stone himself very early on, but Quirrell and Dumbledore don't
       know this.
 
-    * Quirrel eventually takes some students hostage as part of his bid for the
+    * Quirrell eventually takes some students hostage as part of his bid for the
       stone, including Harry.
 
     * Harry defeats him, while trying very hard to not make himself look
@@ -170,6 +206,23 @@ Here's my outline so far:
 
 * Harry does not get on the Quidditch team his first year.
 
+  * The flying class incident happens, but Harry is in the other class because
+    he's a Ravenclaw, so he isn't present. We only hear about it happening
+    off-camera; Ron and Draco both got detention and banned from further flying
+    lessons.
+
+  * Hermione does not like flying at all, and basically refuses to leave the
+    ground during the lessons.
+
+  * In the troll incident above, Harry rescues Hermione by flying a broom. He is
+    seen by teachers.
+
+    * Hermione gains a new appreciation for flying, and agrees to let Harry take
+      her flying again sometime.
+
+    * Flitwick and Hooch recommend that Harry try our for Quidditch in 3rd year,
+      when some spots will open up.
+
 * Harry gets the cloak first year, but realizes it has tracking charms and such
   on it courtesy of Dumbledore.
 
@@ -200,19 +253,25 @@ Here's my outline so far:
 
     * Many purebloods, notably Malfoy, lose quite a lot of money and power.
 
+    * It comes out that Harry is Sirius' heir, and so Draco hates Harry even
+      more now.
+
 * Second year we still get basilisk attacks.
 
   * The diary is already dead, but Lucius had communicated with it beforehand.
 
   * Draco is instructed to release the basilisk.
 
-  * It doesn't help that he isn't a parselmouth and has no real control over it.
+  * It doesn't help that he isn't a parceltongue and has no real control over
+    it.
 
   * Students die. So does Lockhart.
 
   * Hagrid still arrested without due process.
 
-  * Harry, being a parseltongue, manages to assume control of the basilisk and
+  * Dumbledore essentially refuses to do anything, as per original timeline.
+
+  * Harry, being a parceltongue, manages to assume control of the basilisk and
     divert it from its rampage.
 
     * He doesn't want to kill it, but it can't stay in the school.
@@ -221,7 +280,7 @@ Here's my outline so far:
       to sleep.
 
     * Harry gives it to the Goblins, who assure him that they have access to
-      parseltongue Goblins and will use it for bank security.
+      parceltongue Goblins and will use it for bank security.
 
     * The Goblins issue a statement (at Harry's request) saying they were paid
       to defeat the basilisk and have done so.
@@ -234,13 +293,75 @@ Here's my outline so far:
 
   * Dobby, basically the same as canon.
 
+    * Over the summer, Dobby has been stealing mail.
+
+      * Hermione and Harry were communicating using the phone, and in person.
+        Hermione had not realized there was a problem.
+
+      * Harry had noticed the missing mail, because he was expecting statements
+        from the Goblins and remembered the past timeline.
+
+        * So he contacted the Goblins and arranged for Dobby's magical signature
+          to be registered as a criminal elf with them.
+
+    * Harry and Hermione arrive at the train station, and are delayed by Dobby
+      blocking the portal to the platform.
+
+      * The Weasleys arrive at about the same time. Ron is blocked with them.
+
+        * Because Dumbledore is still hoping to setup Harry with his pet light
+          side family.
+
+      * Ron immediately overreacts and steals his family's car to fly to
+        Hogwarts.
+
+      * Harry and Hermione call the aurors. They are apparated onto the platform
+        by one.
+
+        * The aurors also record Dobby's magical signature and register it as a
+          likely criminal.
+
+      * Ron arrives at Hogwarts in exactly the same way as canon.
+
+    * Harry is studying in the library with Hermione during the Quidditch match.
+      Dobby still attacks him with a bludger.
+
+      * Turns out that Irma Pince is a hell of a lot better at healing charms
+        than Lockhart is. Also, she's **really** mad about a bludger somehow
+        making its way into the library.
+
+      * So she gets Quidditch cancelled until the problem can be identified.
+
+      * Of course, Draco had bought his way on to the team this year. So now
+        Draco hates Harry even more.
+
+    * When the Goblins capture the Basilisk, they identify Dobby by magical
+      signature.
+
+      * Dobby is repossessed and forcibly freed, as supported by law regarding
+        elves used in criminal acts.
+
+      * Harry and Hermione get this whole lecture from the Goblins about how
+        "some races need someone to rule them, or they devolve into chaos and
+        violence."
+
+        * Dobby goes to work for the Goblins.
+
+        * Hermione does not start S.P.E.W., but instead asks if there's any way
+          to help the Goblins with their situation.
+
+        * This whole thing forshadows the Goblins taking over Britain, but of
+          course Harry can't see it coming.
+
+      * And, of course, Draco just lost his elf and blames Harry.
+
 * Also second year, we need some political movements in the background.
 
   * Sirius has taken his seat on the Wizengamot, and is doing his best to get
     revenge on those who wronged him.
 
-  * Goblin rights are supported because hey, they helped him get revenge, and
-    it's something that would've pissed off his parents.
+  * Goblin rights are supported by Sirius because hey, they helped him get
+    revenge, and it's something that would've pissed off his parents.
 
   * Along with international pressure from the ICW, he successfully campaigns to
     have Dementors removed from Azkaban.
@@ -253,9 +374,19 @@ Here's my outline so far:
   * No Dementors near Hogwarts to begin with, but there is talk about them in
     the background.
 
-  * Harry signs up for runes and arithmancy and care. Flitwick does not allow
+  * Harry signs up for runes, arithmancy, and care. Flitwick does not allow
     Hermione to sign up for everything, so she takes the same as Harry.
 
+    * Dumbledore tries to force Harry to sign up for Divination.
+
+    * Harry eventually just settles on the plan "I'll show up for Arithmancy,
+      and I'll do the work for Arithmancy, and I won't show up or do the
+      homework for Divination, and I'd like to see them punish me for attending
+      class."
+
+    * After a few faceoffs, Dumbledore eventually has to cave in the face of
+      objections from over half his staff.
+
   * Harry, feeling like this is going to finally be a calm year, decides to sign
     up for Quidditch.
 
@@ -263,6 +394,9 @@ Here's my outline so far:
 
     * He's OK, but not spectacular.
 
+    * Hermione decides to try out as well, having enjoyed flying with Harry.
+      Turns out that she's rubbish.
+
   * Dementor attacks!
 
     * Hogsmeade weekend, resulting in evacuation interrupting Harry's first
@@ -270,6 +404,14 @@ Here's my outline so far:
 
     * Quidditch match, resulting in serious injury to some players.
 
+      * Harry isn't involved (it's not a Ravenclaw game).
+
+      * Harry, fearing for student safety, petitions the school and gets
+        Quidditch cancelled until the Dementors can be removed.
+
+        * Draco, of course, is angered by this because he's now unable to play
+          Quidditch *again*, and it's once more Harry's fault.
+
   * Harry isn't the one to solve the problem this time; ICW authorities step in
     and contain the Dementors.
 
@@ -282,16 +424,53 @@ Here's my outline so far:
 
       * A faction blaming the foreigners for creating the problem to begin with.
 
+  * Lupin, as per original timeline, does not introduce himself to Harry as a
+    friend of the family.
+
+    * Harry knows that Lupin is in Dumbledore's pocket, and had already soured
+      Sirius to him on the grounds that "he should have looked into your
+      situation" and "why did he never try to find me as a child" and such.
+
+    * Hermione decides to ask Lupin for Patronus training. He agrees, in the
+      face of the Dementor attack at the Quidditch match.
+
+    * Hermione "trains" Harry to cast the Patronus.
+
   * Snape outs Lupin at the end of the year.
 
-* Over this summer, Harry attends the Quidditch World Cup with Sirius.
+    * Hermione, having liked Lupin, is incensed.
+
+    * Harry agrees with Hermione that it's stupid that werewolves have no job
+      prospects, especially as in this timeline Lupin technically never did
+      anything wrong.
 
-  * Ireland is not playing.
+    * As a way to make Hermione happy, and keep Lupin from being a resource for
+      Dumbledore, Harry arranges for Lupin to get a job with the Goblins.
+
+      * This leads the Goblins to eventually hiring essentially all of Britain's
+        werewolf population as guards and cursebreakers.
+
+      * These werewolves eventually form a core of the army that the Goblins use
+        to invade.
+
+* Over the summer, Harry attends the Quidditch World Cup with Sirius.
+
+  * Ireland is not playing. Harry recognizes this as just an example of how the
+    timelines are becoming more and more different.
+
+  * Hermione is incensed that the Veela are being objectified.
 
   * Bulgaria wins this time.
 
   * No deatheater attack.
 
+  * So, as the post-game celebrations are not interrupted this time, Harry and
+    Hermione have time to track down the Veela and talk to them about how they
+    are also being treated as second-class citizens.
+
+  * The Veela are put in contact with the Goblins, who at this point are
+    starting to organize quite a large collection of "undesirable" magicals.
+
 * Fourth year: Dumbledore has organized the Triwizard Tournament, primarily as a
   mechanism to restore some of Britain's fading glory.
 
@@ -458,7 +637,7 @@ Here's my outline so far:
     "Reformed British Magical Empire".
 
   * We end the story with Harry, horrified at what he's done, making motions
-    towards fleeing to Australia.
+    towards fleeing to Australia with Hermione and a few others.
 
     * He is discretely notified that the Goblins are fine with this, but don't
       really realize that he's fleeing.