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93Four Gryffindor first-years walked down the stairs to the common room Saturday 93Four Gryffindor first-years walked down the stairs to the common room Saturday
94morning. They had *slept in*, a concept so phenomenally amazing to them that 94morning. They had *slept in,* a concept so phenomenally amazing to them that
95they could scarcely keep the grins off their faces. Upon entering the common 95they could scarcely keep the grins off their faces. Upon entering the common
96room, they were greeted by a mob. 96room, they were greeted by a mob.
97 97
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152> I've never been particularly happy with this piece; I've erased it and started 152> I've never been particularly happy with this piece; I've erased it and started
153> over at least once. It's a simple idea, but the execution seems to be very 153> over at least once. It's a simple idea, but the execution seems to be very
154> dialog-heavy, which is a challenge for me to write. I am especially unhappy 154> dialog-heavy, which is a challenge for me to write. I am especially unhappy
155> with McGonagall's part towards the end; it feels like there should be *more*, 155> with McGonagall's part towards the end; it feels like there should be *more,*
156> but I seem unable to flesh that out. At nearly 1,200 words it's an acceptable 156> but I seem unable to flesh that out. At nearly 1,200 words it's an acceptable
157> length for a oneshot, but I know I achieved neither elegance nor depth in 157> length for a oneshot, but I know I achieved neither elegance nor depth in
158> storytelling. 158> storytelling.
@@ -162,7 +162,7 @@ good night's sleep.
162> term is pushing it) but the students involved haven't learned *any* 162> term is pushing it) but the students involved haven't learned *any*
163> interesting spells at that point. Silencing is fifth-year material, they can't 163> interesting spells at that point. Silencing is fifth-year material, they can't
164> stun each other to sleep, they can't even levitate Ron out the window until 164> stun each other to sleep, they can't even levitate Ron out the window until
165> Halloween, which is near the end of *week 9*. At least by week 4 Harry has his 165> Halloween, which is near the end of *week 9.* At least by week 4 Harry has his
166> broom, and I can invoke Percy for a silencing charm. I think it might be 166> broom, and I can invoke Percy for a silencing charm. I think it might be
167> funnier in a later year when the dorm-mates can have a scene where they try 167> funnier in a later year when the dorm-mates can have a scene where they try
168> more and more outlandish magical solutions, but at the same time I like the 168> more and more outlandish magical solutions, but at the same time I like the