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| author | Julian Blake Kongslie | 2011-11-23 19:29:57 -0800 |
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| committer | Julian Blake Kongslie | 2011-11-23 19:29:57 -0800 |
| commit | 9b57fb69df572bdfc9b4820dd47605487dbc5a06 (patch) | |
| tree | 82af0241943558787e84a78ffbde793cfdbbf696 /oneshots/four-weeks.mdwn | |
| parent | Various stylesheet changes. (diff) | |
| download | writing-9b57fb69df572bdfc9b4820dd47605487dbc5a06.tar.xz | |
Minor typographic corrections.
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diff --git a/oneshots/four-weeks.mdwn b/oneshots/four-weeks.mdwn index 02afcf6..8895c61 100644 --- a/oneshots/four-weeks.mdwn +++ b/oneshots/four-weeks.mdwn | |||
| @@ -91,7 +91,7 @@ Ron, now. Finally, they could sleep. | |||
| 91 | <hr /> | 91 | <hr /> |
| 92 | 92 | ||
| 93 | Four Gryffindor first-years walked down the stairs to the common room Saturday | 93 | Four Gryffindor first-years walked down the stairs to the common room Saturday |
| 94 | morning. They had *slept in*, a concept so phenomenally amazing to them that | 94 | morning. They had *slept in,* a concept so phenomenally amazing to them that |
| 95 | they could scarcely keep the grins off their faces. Upon entering the common | 95 | they could scarcely keep the grins off their faces. Upon entering the common |
| 96 | room, they were greeted by a mob. | 96 | room, they were greeted by a mob. |
| 97 | 97 | ||
| @@ -152,7 +152,7 @@ good night's sleep. | |||
| 152 | > I've never been particularly happy with this piece; I've erased it and started | 152 | > I've never been particularly happy with this piece; I've erased it and started |
| 153 | > over at least once. It's a simple idea, but the execution seems to be very | 153 | > over at least once. It's a simple idea, but the execution seems to be very |
| 154 | > dialog-heavy, which is a challenge for me to write. I am especially unhappy | 154 | > dialog-heavy, which is a challenge for me to write. I am especially unhappy |
| 155 | > with McGonagall's part towards the end; it feels like there should be *more*, | 155 | > with McGonagall's part towards the end; it feels like there should be *more,* |
| 156 | > but I seem unable to flesh that out. At nearly 1,200 words it's an acceptable | 156 | > but I seem unable to flesh that out. At nearly 1,200 words it's an acceptable |
| 157 | > length for a oneshot, but I know I achieved neither elegance nor depth in | 157 | > length for a oneshot, but I know I achieved neither elegance nor depth in |
| 158 | > storytelling. | 158 | > storytelling. |
| @@ -162,7 +162,7 @@ good night's sleep. | |||
| 162 | > term is pushing it) but the students involved haven't learned *any* | 162 | > term is pushing it) but the students involved haven't learned *any* |
| 163 | > interesting spells at that point. Silencing is fifth-year material, they can't | 163 | > interesting spells at that point. Silencing is fifth-year material, they can't |
| 164 | > stun each other to sleep, they can't even levitate Ron out the window until | 164 | > stun each other to sleep, they can't even levitate Ron out the window until |
| 165 | > Halloween, which is near the end of *week 9*. At least by week 4 Harry has his | 165 | > Halloween, which is near the end of *week 9.* At least by week 4 Harry has his |
| 166 | > broom, and I can invoke Percy for a silencing charm. I think it might be | 166 | > broom, and I can invoke Percy for a silencing charm. I think it might be |
| 167 | > funnier in a later year when the dorm-mates can have a scene where they try | 167 | > funnier in a later year when the dorm-mates can have a scene where they try |
| 168 | > more and more outlandish magical solutions, but at the same time I like the | 168 | > more and more outlandish magical solutions, but at the same time I like the |
